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In some countries it is common for young people to leave home and live on their own or with friends when they finish school. Some people think this is a good idea for young people. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the 21st century generation,
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 are more likely to live out alone or with friends. I think it helps teenagers be independent and self-disciplinary.
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, I believe it is a very good idea to have a
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 away from the
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 who can help you the most when you start a career or
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 because in
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 way you can stop relying on these
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 and start believing in yourself. To start with, many young adults find them lack social skills and domestic skills,
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 as cooking, buying raw food, commuting to work and doing chores. Living alone or with a friend will help these
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 understand the importance of these domestic works and in fact doing it on their own.
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 is not solely about work or academic study, it
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 contains many other unexpected things and unwanted doings.
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, living without parents can benefit your style of living. Most young teens need to be awakened by their mothers or fathers in the early morning to go to school.
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, along with time, these
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's ability to take care of their own living style and timetable is sorely lacking.
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 absence of skill may cause a serious problem when one is having
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 jobs or when they are forced to leave home to study or work somewhere far. Overall, it is a great thing for individuals to have a
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 away from their parents. It helps build a good lifestyle and drives
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 to do things more independently.

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