Do you think it is better for students to work before their university study? why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.

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do to work before university study .There is a widespread worry that

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from the fact that by observing the aforementioned trend, people hand not only realised its gravity

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

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Do you think it is better for students to work before their university study? why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.

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