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Question, without capital punishment our lives less secure crimes and violence increase , capital punishments is essential to control violence to what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Crime
 is rife all over the world .There are those who claim that the
death
 penalty makes the community vulnerable and a better place to live . It plays a vital role to curb the heinous
crime
 from society.
However
, opponents disagree with the above statement and opine that
life
 imprisonment is
instead
 a better alternative to eradicate the
crime
 of any particular nation.
this
 essay will discuss whether execution or sending them to
jail
 is a great option. On the one hand, there are numerous inevitable benefits to sentence the
death
 penalty for, who committed major crimes. The
first
 and the foremost reason is its deter the
crime
 rate from the societies
such
 as , human trafficking , smuggling, killing someone, rape, child abuse these are crimes never be tolerated by the judiciary, Since, fear of
death
 stops them from committing offences. For example, there are some nations like Dubai , New Zealand, Hongkong, these nations have made strict legislations against major criminals,
Consequently
, the
crime
 rate is less than in other countries.
Therefore
, these punishments insist wrongdoing person think before doing unprecedented or unprecedented
crime
 in their country
On the other hand
, the executive is not more advantageous .it has some drawbacks,
firstly
 sometimes executing prisoners create a violent culture and encourage revenge. So someone from a convicted family member will become a criminal because of that. So , I m totally against with capital punishments. Sending them to
jail
 is the better alternative , behind the darkness of the bars realise each and every day even every moment of their
life
 that they are in
jail
 because they did something big wrong .
Hence
, it helps to reduce the
crime
 from our societies and
also
 a normal person can live their
life
 without any fear In conclusion, capital punishments and lifetime imprisonment both play a significant role to deter the
crime
 rate,
however
, In my point of view sending them to
jail
 till the end of their
life
 is a better option where they will wait for their
death
 not to meet someone.
Submitted by naresh on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • capital punishment
  • security
  • crime
  • violence
  • essential
  • control
  • debate
  • arguments
  • favor
  • against
  • summarize
  • restate
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