The world today is a safer place than it was a hundred years ago, and governments should stop spending large amounts of money on their armed forces. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The
world
is now
safer
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place than it was a century ago.
Therefore
,
governments
should not waste
vast
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a vast
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amount of
money
on their armed
force
. It is indisputable that
security
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the security
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of people in each region is one of the main factors to remain peaceful lives in humanity.
However
, there are many international agreements happens nowadays and I believed that the
world
can be peaceful with the intention of morals and ethics rather than the
violence
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violent
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war. A century ago, the
world
is suffered from
World
War I, II and almost every country around the
world
gave their hope on the armed
force
to protect their best regions. The
governments
invested tremendous
money
on
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in
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military
force
in
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for
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purpose
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the purpose
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of guarding their land.
For example
, America invested
money
to invent
military
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a military
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submarine over trillion dollars to attack their enemy
countries
.
Moreover
, America
also
invent
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invents
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the
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apply
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powerful weapons like nuclear bombs, as we all knew that Hiroshima city was destroyed by
this
atomic bomb and
this
situation had led to the victory of America and their allies
countries
.
This
is why the
governments
spend
large
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a large
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amount of
money
on their armed
force
until today.
On the other hand
, there are many international agreements after WWII to remain
peace
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peaceful
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in
the
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apply
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globalization.
For instance
, many international laws and agreements are set up to remain the benefits of states follows the basic morals and ethics including the international organization
such
as
UN
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the UN
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(United Nation).
Therefore
, the
world
today is now safer than it was a century ago because there is no violence like Word War I or II. Unfortunately, there are people in many
countries
suffer
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who suffer
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from
huger
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hunger
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and still live in poor health conditions.
Hence
, the
governments
should concern about the problems of
economy
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the economy
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and health issues. They should spend
money
to improve
this
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these
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conditions rather than the armed
force
. In conclusion, the major problem of many
countries
around the
world
is not about the terrestrial but the economic status of people. I strongly agreed
to
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with
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this
essay that the
governments
should stop spend
large
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a large
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amount of
money
on their armed
force
but should spend
money
to improve the quality of lives.
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