Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they released from prison. What do you think are the cause of this? What possible solutions can you suggest?

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society has faced many offenders who committed a
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several times even after they released from jail;
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, the community deals with
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. Inappropriate education, unsuitable punishments and many other factors may lead to
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to keep
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issue under control. In my view, some of the punishments that the
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has determined are not fitted the
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and they may result reversely.
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and judge has sentenced him
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her to a couple of years in prison; obviously, he
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she will murder someone in jail or as soon as he released from prison he
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she will commit a
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because of his
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her mental illness.
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, sometimes that punishment that has determined for a
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should be intensified to prevent
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;
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, perhaps we need an appropriate education
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punishment. As a viable solution, the
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has to consider a practical education for some lawbreakers to learn them as
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law-abiding citizen and make them useful for their society.
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must intensify as a preventive measure.
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suitable punishment, he will start his illegal business from its beginning again and again. In conclusion, the
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to punish criminals suitably and provide them with reasonable training to prevent
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. I can predict that with these measures the
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will be able to stand against
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rehabilitation
  • Reintegrate
  • Social stigma
  • Recidivism
  • Criminal records
  • Ex-offender
  • Associations
  • Comprehensive
  • Workforce
  • Mentoring
  • Incentivize
  • Stigmatize
  • Subsidies
  • Legitimate
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