Some people think the increasing business and cultural contact between countries brings many positive effects. Others say it causes the loss of national identities. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

In

this

modern era, many

business

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man

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men

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would like to start

international

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business

in order

to

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people are gotten more benefit.

However

, a fair amount of people think that the expanding

business

and cultural contact between nations gives many positive effects while others say that

this

trend causes the loss of national identities. Viewing from a general perspective, the essay discusses

both

viewpints

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viewpoints

, I personally agree with the former opinion for the following reasons. On the one hand, there are many advantages

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come when the country will collaborate

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within

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another country in many ways

such

as

business

and

cultural

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.

Firstly

, the job opportunity

are

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dramatically increased in order to

both

the

countries

citizens are gotten benefit.

Secondly

, they are allowed to use them own country resources while the government are obtained huge tax from

business

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as a

result

these kinds of activities is one of the

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for nation improvements.

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, many developed

countries

are

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mingled

to

stard

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start

marketing who developing

countries

such

as India

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as a

result

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Indian folks are gotten

many

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work

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from these companies.

On the other hand

,

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are brought more effects for

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the loss

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of state uniqueness irrefutably.

This

trend will continue while the state will never have a chance to develop because

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between

countries

are always need

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to collaborate in any circumstances

as a

result

many foreigners are gotten employment

cpmpared

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compared

to local state human.

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recent

survey said that many underdeveloped nations are suffered

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this

plan in

form

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to

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they are lost their original uniqueness. To conclude, undoubtedly

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project is brought

both

positive as well negative.

Nevertheless

, In my opinion

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this

plan gets more advantages to

the

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both

countries

when they are being

collobrated

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collaborated

to do marketing and other events too

as a

result

automatically

both

territory as well as the individuals financial status will improve dramatically.