Some people think the increasing business and cultural contact between countries brings many positive effects. Others say it causes the loss of national identities. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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people are gotten more benefit.
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, a fair amount of people think that the expanding
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and cultural contact between nations gives many positive effects while others say that
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trend causes the loss of national identities. Viewing from a general perspective, the essay discusses
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, I personally agree with the former opinion for the following reasons. On the one hand, there are many advantages
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come when the country will collaborate
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dramatically increased in order to
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the
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citizens are gotten benefit.
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, they are allowed to use them own country resources while the government are obtained huge tax from
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these kinds of activities is one of the
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for nation improvements.
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mingled
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start
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Indian folks are gotten
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from these companies.
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are brought more effects for
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of state uniqueness irrefutably.
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trend will continue while the state will never have a chance to develop because
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between
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are always need
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to collaborate in any circumstances
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many foreigners are gotten employment
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compared
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they are lost their original uniqueness. To conclude, undoubtedly
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positive as well negative.
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plan gets more advantages to
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both
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countries
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when they are being
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collaborated
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automatically
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territory as well as the individuals financial status will improve dramatically.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • cultural exchange
  • economic growth
  • cultural homogenization
  • national identity
  • cultural diversity
  • international trade
  • investment opportunities
  • tolerance
  • cultural preservation
  • traditional values
  • global influence
  • cultural dilution
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