Despite the benefits for health, fewer people today than ever before exercise by walking. Why is this? What can be done to encourage more walking?
It is the fact that
,
individuals do exercise by walking more necessary than ever forgetting the advantages of healthy life. There are serval situations for Remove the comma
apply
such
situations and Linking Words
also
few visible influences too. Linking Words
This
essay will discuss causes and their solutions in the following paragraph with relevant examples.
It is not neglectable that walking helps masses to be fit and fine. Linking Words
Firstly
, in Linking Words
this
contemporary era, people do not get enough Linking Words
time
to do exercise or walking because of unbalanced working hours, Use synonyms
however
, even though they get spare Linking Words
time
in the morning they think, it would be the waste of Use synonyms
time
to go Use synonyms
for
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apply
a
jogging Remove the article
apply
instead
of that would prefer to rest a bit longer. Linking Words
For example
, people would not get enough sleep because of extended working hours and it Linking Words
derectly
impact on their day to day life. Individuals do not have the energy to wakes up early or go Correct your spelling
directly
for
joggingChange preposition
apply
,
if we talk about women Remove the comma
apply
then
they have to Linking Words
mannage
everything Correct your spelling
manage
such
asLinking Words
,
home chores, office, preparing food, if they have children Remove the comma
apply
then
they have to look after them. Linking Words
Besides
, looking into all Linking Words
these
work getting Correct determiner usage
this
time
for themselves is very hard for women, Use synonyms
hence
they would favour Linking Words
of
sleeping a bit longer. Change preposition
apply
On the other hand
, these masses faced many health issues as well as mental stress, Linking Words
such
as anxiety, obesity, knee pain you name it.
Despite uneven lifestyle, Linking Words
individuls
could manage their own Correct your spelling
individuals
time
for walking. Use synonyms
For instance
, if the masses at work Linking Words
they
could walk around as much as they can. In the office for the internal Correct pronoun usage
apply
discussion
they could walk around Add a comma
,discussion
insted
of calling. Correct your spelling
instead
Nevertheless
, Linking Words
on
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at
the
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apply
lunch
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lunchtime
time
everyone gets one hour for lunch, Use synonyms
devide
that Correct your spelling
divide
decided
time
half hr for lunch and Use synonyms
half
for Add an article
a half
walk
, doing Add an article
a walk
this
, people distract themselves and get a Linking Words
relef
from work stress. Correct your spelling
relief
In addition
, Linking Words
regime
should have Add an article
the regime
look
into these situations and must start Add an article
a look
awareness
campaign for everyone for Add an article
an awareness
the
better healthy Correct article usage
a
life style
.
To conclude, considering above mentioned points it is evident that, sedentary lifestyle has many bad effects on health so everyone must take Correct your spelling
lifestyle
time
for themselves and go for a walk which Use synonyms
help
them to fight with upcoming Change the verb form
helps
helth
problems.Correct your spelling
health
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...