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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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Since ancient times, humans have had an impact on nature. Recently,
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 intervenes in the environment are on the rise, and
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 process can lead to horrible consequences, but what can the government and individuals do to prevent
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? There are some harmful human activities
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 can be tackled by
state
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the state
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.
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, factories that pour their waste into the rivers and the oceans,
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causes growth in the
level
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 of pollution. Another example is
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 in the number of constructions
reduces
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 the fertile land areas. Governments can suppress these issues with
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several policies. Taxes and restrictions can be implemented on pollution,
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government
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 can encourage entrepreneurs by giving
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financial aid in order to decrease the
wasting
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level
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 or it can apply some fines against littering.
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, improving the
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 of education leads to a more developed society
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 is aware of their negative effects on
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nature. To go down the number of apartments, it can build
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skyscrapers in order to protect fertile soil.
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, people individually can prevent particular problems
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exhaust
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 fumes produced by cars or littering the ground. Exhaust fumes result in
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poor air quality, for reducing it, the number of cars should be cut down, but how? Habitants are able to use bicycles
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 of
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cars. Littering the ground results in griminess and so
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person can be thought from childhood about their effect
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 the world.
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, parents can explain to their children why they should not pollute the ground. Taking everything into the account, there are
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 harmful damages
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humankind on the environment. Some of them should handle at the state
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, but individuals'
behaviors
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 are
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 important
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 because big revolutions start with small steps.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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