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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#rubbish #governments #amount
In today's world,
people
 are the main reason for wastes improvement. I would like to discuss
about
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some of the ways that have a significant effect on that and how government can reduce the number of wastes. One of the important reason for
this
 issue can be improvements in consumerism. A huge amount of the
products
 are produced and sold among the
people
, which every item that sold between us have a great number of none important things.
For example
, for buying a shampoo some plastics given to you which will be without use in the future and these unnecessary
items
 brings a wide range of rubbish.
Furthermore
, Nowadays many
products
 are manufactured in factories with more than dozens of the same functions.
this
 phenomenon brings a wide range of
items
 in stores, which improve the use of them among the
people
. As result, the more producing the
products
,
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 will be bringing for
us
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 wide range of waste. But there are some practical ways in which government can prevent
this
 phenomenon easily.
Firstly
, they must aware citizens of the dire consequences of these wastes. they can carry out that with some TV programs and some support from influencers
people
such
 as celebrities can encourage individuals to buy
Items
 without any extra things. It means that some
products
 are sell in a market with unuseful packaging and they must avoid
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buying these
items
 which are not suitable for
environment
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In addition
, The recycling system could bring great impact for reducing the amount of the waste. Many of the
items
 can recycle without any reproductions. As results, we can use them again for more once time so there is no sign of waste on them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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