The government should lower the budget on the arts in order to allocate more money on education. To what extent do you agree?

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need of human beings to progress .It
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human beings
to
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live well cultured but it avoids wars and conflicts .
Government
should not lower the
budget
on
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art
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order to allocate more money to
education
. I completely disagree with it .In
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I will discuss why
government
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should not lower
art
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budget
. As we know
education
is required to all and
thier
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their
are
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field where we can utilise
goverment
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government
budget
to progress and its
goverment
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government
duty to make its
budget
high so that coming generations can be well educated in each and every field. Art itself is a part of 
education
field where
msny
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many
more hopes are
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their
to
flourised
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flourish
flourished
and develop .tranferring arts
budget
to
education
site is nonsense type thought
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in fact
government
should
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certain policies and rules so that
this
department can raise
thier
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their
own fund to
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in every
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of
thier
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their
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part. By seeing the
importantance
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importance
of both
feild
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field
government
should make provide more
budget
to both  independently.
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