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Some people argue that testing on animals for medical research is necessary. Others say that this should not happen. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The topic of medical
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 and testing on
animals
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 is subject to much controversy and, on one side of the debate, are those who argue that
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 procedures are morally reprehensible. Is it reasonable for humans to continue to conduct testing on
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 for our own selfish gains? Supporters of animal rights generally claim that
animals
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 have no way to explicitly give consent and that
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 procedures can cause unnecessary pain and even premature death of the creature. We, as humans, often talk about consent in our day-to-day relationships and,
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, anti-testing activists will apply the same logic in these discussions. If an animal cannot speak, can it reasonably agree to
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 subject? While these opponents make valid and important points, it is my view that we should continue to use animal testing since
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research
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 has often resulted in the prevention and even curing of diseases
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 would have once cut our lives short. Many patients who suffer from debilitating illnesses
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 as multiple sclerosis can now enjoy a
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 quality of life thanks to the progress made by
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 has been conducted on
animals
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. The current status quo does not mean that we have to continue testing on
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 forever. My view is that we should endeavour to find other ways we can conduct medical
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 using methods
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 may not have been discovered yet, always keeping in mind the importance of not causing harm to
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 where it can be avoided. For now though, despite the problems of animal consent, I believe the benefits of
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 to human life outweigh the drawbacks.
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