Some believe that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or health club while others think doing everyday activities. Such as walking and climbing stairs is enough. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
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opt for different ways to keep themselves healthy
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as some choose to workout in the gymnasium or various sports club whereas some are of the opinion to make exercise a part of there life by doing walk or climbing staircase while doing there work. I shall discuss both
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viewpoints in the upcoming paragraph. It is seen that
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interests in various games and they wanted to pursue as
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career.
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, the interests
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as weightlifting, swimming,
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etcetera
can be done with regular practice.
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,
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who don't want to go for arduous exercise choose activities
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as yoga, aerobics to which they have to join a particular club where they can avail the services. It is seen that these programmes need
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mentor who can guide the right way of doing the various pose which can't be done on
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own.
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the other hand, it is undeniable that our
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lifestyle was so hard as there was
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of transportation and other facilities,
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, they travel miles on
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feet to get
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work done.
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, they used to be fit and the body was rid of ailments.But nowadays,
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travel in ac cars and buses, thereby, leading to obesity.I believe that one should walk often and choose climbing stairs
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of lifts can be fruitful for
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health.
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,
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will lead to less expenditure as it will save
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money and lessen pollution. It will be
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situation. I believe
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interested
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sports should definitely choose for the sports clubs whereas others should prefer
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, climbing stairs and do
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work
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there own so it keeps them fit at no costs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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