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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Access to foreign
products
 can lead to
massification
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 and homogenization of countries.
Nonetheless
, in my
opinion
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 there are
also
 positive consequences that surpass the negative.
Openness
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 of consumption boundaries can lead to loss of identity and cultural dominance. Owning imported
products
 or bands becomes a sign of status.
As a result
, the
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whole
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hole
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whole
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 industry adapts
their
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its
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products
 to consumer preferences. National
products
 become
second
 options and local design is devalued. Despite the pressure for homogenization just mentioned, access to foreign goods
also
 means access to technology and culture from all over the world.
This
 fact has the potential to create a great environment for innovation. Complex problems of the future demand
this
 kind of exchange and integrated efforts. The key point is to find a balance between adopting whatever is new but giving your own twist.
Also
, openness brings diversity and may contribute
for
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 less discrimination and prejudice against anything
that is
 considered different. In conclusion, market globalization seems to be an irreversible tendency and countries that manage to adapt well have a great potential for cultural and economic development. It is important not to lose the essence of the culture and not to fall
in
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 the error of devaluing ancient national knowledge. By the end of the day, a country´s value lays on everything that makes it unique.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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