Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Access to foreign
products
can lead to
massification
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and homogenization of countries.
Nonetheless
, in my
opinion
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there are
also
positive consequences that surpass the negative.
Openness
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of consumption boundaries can lead to loss of identity and cultural dominance. Owning imported
products
or bands becomes a sign of status.
As a result
, the
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hole
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industry adapts
their
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products
to consumer preferences. National
products
become
second
options and local design is devalued. Despite the pressure for homogenization just mentioned, access to foreign goods
also
means access to technology and culture from all over the world.
This
fact has the potential to create a great environment for innovation. Complex problems of the future demand
this
kind of exchange and integrated efforts. The key point is to find a balance between adopting whatever is new but giving your own twist.
Also
, openness brings diversity and may contribute
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less discrimination and prejudice against anything
that is
considered different. In conclusion, market globalization seems to be an irreversible tendency and countries that manage to adapt well have a great potential for cultural and economic development. It is important not to lose the essence of the culture and not to fall
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the error of devaluing ancient national knowledge. By the end of the day, a country´s value lays on everything that makes it unique.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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