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In many countries, international tourism has become an important source of income. However, it also has negative effects. Do the benefits of international tourism outweigh the disadvantages?

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The world is full of beautiful places.
People
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 from all the
countries
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 visit to see ravishing location. Many
countries
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 economy depend on international
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. While it has some negative outcome too.
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, the advantages of
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 have overlapped the disadvantages. The predominant advantage of international
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 is that it is the source of income for the local
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. Many
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 are surrounded by the sea. They are not developed as the other
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. To illustrate my point, hotel owners, shopkeepers, taxi drivers, and restaurants. All these are dependent on the
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. When a group of
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 come to their country, hotel owner provide them with accommodation, the local shop sells their traditional products, restaurants serve local delicious food, and taxi driver drives them to marvellous places.
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 all these come with a small price that should be paid by the
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,
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 the income of residential
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.
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, the government has profited from
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.
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 has to pay fees to the authorities in the form of visa application.
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, many historical sites have fees to visit inside them by the guidelines of the officials. There are a few drawbacks, one of them is air pollution. Airlines are cheap prices in many
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countries
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. Frequently, the use of aeroplanes has a dramatic effect on the environment.
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,
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 counties do not have a proper drainage system and waste of garbage material. They dump all
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 waste material into the ocean. That has a negative effect on marine life. In conclusion, 'a coin has two sides.
Tourism
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 has the largest economy of many
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.
People
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 are dependent on
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, we can never neglect the consequences of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Revenue
  • Accommodation
  • Cultural exchange
  • Infrastructure
  • Pollution
  • Erosion
  • Overcrowding
  • Economic dependency
  • Global events
  • Sustainable tourism
  • Mutual understanding
  • Strain on natural resources
  • Foot traffic
  • Local traditions and customs
  • Cultural awareness
  • Vulnerable
  • Pandemics
  • Political instability
  • Residue
  • Host country
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