It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30 as this is best both for individual and society. do you agree or disagree?
Marriage is society. It is considered appropriate from both personal and social
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life-long contract not only between two individuals but Correct article usage
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to get engaged before the age of 30. I completely disagree with Fix the agreement mistake
perspectives
this
notion. In the upcoming paragraphs, I will put forth my views in detail.
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wedding before 30 Correct article usage
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years
would bring about an immature relationship. To elaborate, in Use synonyms
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modern era, most of the families are nuclear in nature. Linking Words
Therefore
, the parents would overcare their children. Linking Words
Thus
their character would remain childish even if they acquire higher education. In Linking Words
such
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relationship
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be ruined
such
immature individuals get engaged without adequate life experience. Linking Words
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rising among the couples who became united before 30 Change preposition
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found
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were found
due to
mere personal issues.
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besides
the above individual impacts, Linking Words
such
weddings have a lot of influence on society. To elaborate, nowadays, Linking Words
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population expansion, even though, Correct article usage
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are having
good educational qualifications,they might not obtain a decent job before Wrong verb form
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At the same time, when they have to undertake extra responsibility for their family and children would certainly question their financial stability. Correct word choice
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, that would Linking Words
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have
long term
detrimental effects on society, in terms of enhanced theft and other crimes. Add a hyphen
long-term
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according to
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the
survey conducted by the Hindu newspaper, 70% of early wedded couples suffer from massive debts and the eventual downward growth of the nation.
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To conclude
, in my opinion, marriage before 30 Linking Words
years
would be deleterious for individuals, Use synonyms
as well as
the community. It is Linking Words
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