do you agree that the advantages of cars outweigh the disadvantages?

cars
plays
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a
prominant
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prominent
role in daily life as we see
almost
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most
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people
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all people
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have their own
cars
.
although
cars
have some
concsequences
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consequences
but
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according
to
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me
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cars
advantages can outweigh the disadvantages.
One
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the
one
hand , using
cars
unnecssarily
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unnecessarily
brings some problems too,like
people
perfer
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prefer
cars
to smaller distances where they can go by walk
esaily
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easily
, which brings
lazyness
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laziness
in
people
.
Moreover
, some
people
drive
cars
too fast and drink alcohol while driving , which causes
enomours
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enormous
dangerous accidents. Sometimes these accidents cost a person life or near to death. Usings
cars
are more expensive
then
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than
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taking public
transport
.
Now a days
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,
number
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the number
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of
cars
are immensely increasing which leads to the pollution.
On the other hand
,
cars
provide
convinience
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convenience
as well as make saving time in
this
fastest generation.
People
do not have to wait for longer times to get buses or they do not have to walk so much . To add more to
this
we
does
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not
have
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carry so much of the wait in our hands as well as
one
can play music of their own choice and personal
cars
give more privacy while travelling
then
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other
transport
. For
instace
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instance
: you can go from
one
destination to another without wasting time
in
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waiting for buses or you can take random stops anywhere you want which is not possible
in
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on
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public
transport
.
therefore
, time and distance
is
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not barriers anymore. It plays an important role especially when you have elder or sick family members at home because
its
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it's
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very for them to travel by any other means of
transport
. In
conculsion
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conclusion
,
acoording
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according
to my way of thinking the advantages of
cars
can outweigh
its
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their
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disadvanges
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disadvantages
because
cars
are
such
a miracle for human life if we use
it
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them
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carefully .
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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