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It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay.

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The best way for
children
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 to grow in the rural areas than in the metro cities .youth can have a wired range of options to choose from in cities
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 as educational institutes,part-time courses and some sports activities.In my opinion, I completely disagree with
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.I shall examine my view on
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 in the following paragraphs. On
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side
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,parents are very particular about their choice of schools with lots of expectation on carrier growth for their
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's education.
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, more options in the market to choose a good
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 but in the countryside, they have only two are less number of school available.Always is a better choose
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, In a rural ,area the school are with fewer teachers and very minimal educational factualities provided.Mainly, up to five are seventh classes only be taken.
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,the case is quite opposite in
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 schools. On the other
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, communication of the youngest will improve in modern educational culture, they can increase their speaking skills it can add an advantage for them. The
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 will teach many things from society and friends.For instances, a person who lived in the countryside has only had expertise in speaking in
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 language.In another case, the
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 whos bring up done on the
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side
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 can speak more than
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 language. In conclusion, these days, parents are very particular about their schooling so they choose the
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, the bring up in cities are helps their
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 to communicate very well in their life
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 gain good knowledge.In my opinion, I disagree with
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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