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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other kinds of aid could be provided?

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Poor
countries
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 quite often receive financial help from richer
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, but it does not eliminate the problems related to poverty.
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, other types of support rather than financial aid should be provided by developed
countries
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 to the poor ones. I absolutely agree with
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 notion as it seems that many
countries
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 are in the need of natural
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 and proper
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.
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, some nations do not possess the necessary
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 for development in a number of spheres. New shops, business centres, factories and other buildings cannot be built without
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such
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 as bricks, stones, logs, etc.
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,
this
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 stops some
countries
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 from producing their own products not allowing them to earn money and create workplaces for local citizens.
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,
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 Kongo is rich in rare minerals and metals, it cannot process these
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 due to the lack of expensive equipment.
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, the lack of experts and a proper
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 system slow down the growth of many
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. If foreign professionals had taught people in poor
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, the overall economy and development might have been better.
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, without advances in the
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 system, it is nearly impossible to reach high results. A prime example would be Japan. It became one of the leading
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 and outstripped other states because a lot of
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 had been invested into
education
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. In conclusion, while developed
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 give money to poorer ones, it seems that
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 approach does not solve the problems with poverty. It is thought that other types of help should be given and I agree with that. Providing other types of
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 and experts from different fields are among possible and more effective kinds of aid.
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