Many people think that too much attention and resources are given to the protection of wild animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree?

For centuries, deforestation, farming, urbanisation and other human activities have wreaked havoc with wild animal species and sent them to the verge of extinction. Regarding wildlife protection, awareness has been raised and attempts have been made.
However
, some hold the idea that the protection of endangered species has been given
inordinate
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amount of attention and resources. Personally, I do not see eye to eye with
this
point of view. In the
first
place, wildlife protection has never taken centre stage on the media. Compared with celebrities,
for example
, the amount of coverage of wild
animals
is infinitesimal. Clearly, the reason is profits.
In other words
, programs featuring wild
animals
do not generate interest of the public and
accordingly
returns for the producers. The absence of educational programs concerning the lives of wild
animals
has blinded people to the reality that wild
animals
are dying and the ecological system
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being disrupted severely.
In addition
, governments around the world do not prioritise wildlife conservation in their agenda’s. As a matter of fact, laws to save wild
animals
have been introduced, but they are loosely enforced. Because of
this
, every man can freely exploit land, chop down forests, and divert the water sources, all of which combine to destroy the natural habitats of threatened
animals
. In every
corners
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of the world, with or without intention, human
are
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still causing changes in climatic and
geopgraphical
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conditions, which accelerates
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animal extinction. In light of
this
fact, I feel t
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • species extinction
  • wildlife conservation
  • sustainable development
  • ecosystem services
  • habitat destruction
  • endangered species
  • conservation efforts
  • natural heritage
  • human encroachment
  • poaching
  • genetic diversity
  • climate change
  • environmental stewardship
  • protection measures
  • wildlife sanctuary
  • biological significance
  • conservation biology
  • environmental advocacy
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