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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems

#country #language
In
this
 day and age, person after person is moving abroad for
numberous
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numerous
 reasons, but many of them might have the same fate of living in a
country
 that does not speak their mother
tounge
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tongue
 and that can be challenging. In fact, it can cause serious misunderstanding not only
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 social
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occasions
 but
also
 in practical situations as well. I,
nonetheless
, believe that the advantages of living in a
country
 where
official
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language
 is different from yours
is
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 far
outweight
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outweigh
outweighed
 its disadvantages. It is undeniable that there are some major obstacles to build your life in a foreign
country
 let alone not fluent in their
language
. Some social problems will often
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such
 as being totally confused and wondering what is it that so funny about what that comedian on stage just said, not aware that your name is being called because of its unfamiliar pronunciation etc. Another difficulty is that one’s deficient ability to the
country
’s common spoken
language
 can paint a false impression of
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 about them and
that is
 never in any circumstances a delight.
For instance
,
language
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 barrier has
caused
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 countless individuals their dream job offer despite their possession of flying academic qualifications or extraordinary work experiences. Those are all for
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 if these professionals do not have the ability to express it to the employer.
On the other hand
, I side with those who disagree that the foreign
language
 is the root of social and practical issues whilst living in a
country
 which’s not yours.
First
 of all, the main cause of social
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controversies
 is that people always
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different
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 opinion about things, it was never the
language
 spoken it was how they use their words.
For example
, America is famously known for their harsh internal political discussions.
Secondly
,
language
 is
a
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 extremely learnable skill. In fact, it is the
first
 skill that each
individuals
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 obtained and mastered since we were born.
Therefore
, there is no reason that human can not gain their proficiency
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 another
language
 if given enough time. In conclusion,
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even though
 a different
language
 from your native speech is a huge setback when living in another
country
, I truly believe there are ways to overcome it to avoid social
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and
 practical complications.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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