People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
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today's
today
todays
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world ,
people
migrate from one
country
to another to find a good livelihood . some
individulals
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individuals
beleive
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believe
that,
people
must follow the
customs
and
traditions
when they settle in a new
country
. As
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my perspective,
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strongly agree with
this
statement because of some problems and benefits one can face with them.
Firstly
, if a person wants to settle in any new
country
, it is
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integral to know about their
customs
and
traditions
so that person can acquire a friendly and
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smooth life.
morover
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moreover
, knowing each other oral history or their way of living creates a friendly bond and
also
makes life more interesting .as well as a person cannot feel alone .
although
, it is tough at
first
to learn about new things but it can be more joyful and helps
people
to accelerate their knowledge about different
culutures
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cultures
.
secondly
,
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the rules and the ways of living is an integral part so that one cannot takes part in illegal activities . for
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instance
: recently in
Canada
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a girl has
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to pay
topay
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penality
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of thousand dollars because she threw
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garbage
garage
gargage
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ont
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not
on
he
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road the police caught her
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just because was not aware of the rules . The
necomers
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newcomers
should get benefits by knowing the culture and tradition of
new
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the new
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country
. In any
new
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we need
a
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help from
people
who already live there
from
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so many years which can only be possible by
buliding
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building
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relationship with them . For
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, when the enterprises want to expand their production in a new
country
,they must be aware of business practices there, which provides them with useful information to maximise profits. Another benefit is that newcomers might gain the
richness
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of knowledge by virtue of the local
customs
and
traditions
, which enables them to actively participate in the activities of the community. In many festivals,
people
are able to participate or join freely and feel harmonious like their own
country
. In conclusion, I would argue that
people
who dwell in a new
country
should follow the
customs
and
traditions
which local
people
observe.
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