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People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #customs #traditions #country
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today's
today
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 world ,
people
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 migrate from one
country
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 to another to find a good livelihood . some
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individuals
beleive
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believe
 that,
people
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 must follow the
customs
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 and
traditions
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 when they settle in a new
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. As
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 strongly agree with
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 statement because of some problems and benefits one can face with them.
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 , if a person wants to settle in any new
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 , it is
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integral to know about their
customs
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 and
traditions
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 so that person can acquire a friendly and
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smooth life.
morover
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moreover
 , knowing each other oral history or their way of living creates a friendly bond and
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 makes life more interesting .as well as a person cannot feel alone .
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 , it is tough at
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 to learn about new things but it can be more joyful and helps
people
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 to accelerate their knowledge about different
culutures
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cultures
.
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,
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 the rules and the ways of living is an integral part so that one cannot takes part in illegal activities . for
instace
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instance
 : recently in
Canada
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,Canada
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 a girl has
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to pay
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penality
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penalty
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 of thousand dollars because she threw
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garbage
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ont
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not
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 road the police caught her
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just because was not aware of the rules . The
necomers
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newcomers
 should get benefits by knowing the culture and tradition of
new
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the new
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country
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. In any
new
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 we need
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help from
people
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 who already live there
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 so many years which can only be possible by
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building
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 relationship with them . For
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, when the enterprises want to expand their production in a new
country
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,they must be aware of business practices there, which provides them with useful information to maximise profits. Another benefit is that newcomers might gain the
richness
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 of knowledge by virtue of the local
customs
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 and
traditions
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, which enables them to actively participate in the activities of the community. In many festivals,
people
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 are able to participate or join freely and feel harmonious like their own
country
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. In conclusion, I would argue that
people
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 who dwell in a new
country
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 should follow the
customs
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 and
traditions
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 which local
people
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 observe.
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