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some people believe that charities should help people in need no matter where those people are in the world/ Others feel that those organizations should only serve the people living in the country where they are based. discuss both sides and give your opinion

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human beings are social creatures and they have to be interactive to live in harmony in the modern world. It is a controversial issue
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whether to broaden humanitarian aid beyond the borders or to restrict those activities within a country. I will discuss both these views before reaching a reasoned conclusion. On the one hand, borderless donations have their own merits.
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, constant but steady financial help would be available to the indigent population all over the globe. To elaborate, under-privileged individuals who reside mainly in improving and under-developed countries might not be able to receive financial assistance from the respective authorities. In
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, that economic support would be indirect. To explain,
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 have no direct duty to find out the eligible selves. Most of the time, a society that wants to be part of
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 monetary remedy might not have to meet the beneficiaries.
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 the United Nations, seven billion needy people all over the world have been helped
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 global charity movements till 2001. Anyhow, proponents of confined charity help have their justifications. To commence with,
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 would be valuable to terminate fraud. To explain, there are a lot of arbitrators who obtain financial windfalls by hindering the availability of fortune to eligible individuals.
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 help would eliminate those wicked people and could support the poor and destitute directly.
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regional humanitarian help would be vital for the
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, a survey conducted by a reputed newspaper reveals that through one-to-one charity activities, for the past five years, the basic living standard has been enhanced in India.
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, with the ideas presented above it is amply clear that both these differing views have their own merits.
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, the credits of
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 humanitarian help outweigh the latter
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 the motive that
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 activities could reach a limitless population.

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