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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Given is a line graph depicting the data between
radio
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 and
television
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 British crowd in 1992. As can be seen,
television
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 is more popular than
radio
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 in the UK during 1992. Looking at
radio
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 in detail, the proportion remained constant at 2.5% from 1 a.
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. to 6 a.
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. before reaching a peak of 25% at about 9 a.
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. .
In addition
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, the proportion of
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audiences
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 followed a dramatical decline overall from 25% to 5%, starting at 9 a.
m
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. until 23
p
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.
m
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. As for
television
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, the percentage of
audiences
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 fluctuated between 6% and 3% from 1a.
m
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. to 8 a.
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. ,followed by a brief dwindle to 4% at 11a.
m
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. After reaching the lowest point of
television
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audiences
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 at 11a.
m
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., the percentage of the crowd increased gradually to 15% at 13
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.
m
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.
Furthermore
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, from 13p.
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 to 15p.
m
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., the portion of
audiences
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 reached a plateau at 15%.
Then
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 the per cent grew substantially to 40% at 19
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.
m
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. and reached a peak of 45% at 21p.
m
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.
Finally
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, the line of
television
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 decreased sharply back to 15% while time was 23p.
m
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.

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