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Some people believe that restoration of old buildings costs too much; we should demolish them and build new ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that rebuilding outdated manufacture would be costly,
therefore
, it is more beneficial to pull it down and make a new one.It is my personal belief that making new buildings would be more reasonable .
Firstly
,all the instructure
structure
 around the world have a lifetime.
In other words
, after few decades the buildings will lose their safety due to acid rain,humid weather and environmental catastrophes .
Therefore
, they have the potential to wreck and have negative impacts on other buildings and people near that
structure
 .
In addition
,the science of making more powerful
structure
 for disasters
such
 as earthquake and tsunami is getting more rich day by day .
As a result
,it would be more advisable to destroy old manufacture and build new ones with modern technology.
However
,the opponents of the idea that rebuilding old
structure
 should not be done claim that some of these old
structure
 have a historic background and should be preserved .
Nevertheless
, I would suggest that rebuilding these manufacture not only might not make that building more powerful due to lack of a powerful basic foundation but
also
 it would be far more costly than making a new and stronger building . In conclusion,it is my belief that making a new
structure
 than rebuilding an old one would be more advisable due to lack of safety and the new science of making far more powerful
structure
 .
However
,surely
this
 idea would be unacceptable to some people but,as I see it,because of the lack of a powerful foundation and the whole question of the cost it would more realistic to build a new
structure
.
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