Some people think that the goverment is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree?

It has been a controversial argument that the
governments
' investment in the crafts whether a waste of
money
or a necessary part of life.
Governments
collect
money
from their citizens in order to open some sort of facilities.I completely disagree that the
governments
should not invest
money
in social skills
such
as arts and entertainments . In modern time people are connected by artcrafts so without music,dance or painting can not exist.
In other words
,arts are medicine for humanity
also
for the animal.
For instance
, those who are treating cancer need high strong medicine and
also
music can decrease their pain and treated them in a natural way.
This
is why the
governments
should
also
invest
money
in art skills.
Furthermore
,investing
money
in crafts can lead a place to make an extra job which can work many people there.
This
would be possible to decrease the amount of unemployment.For
example
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a dance team encouraged by the government can show their performance in certain places.
Therefore
,
this
can kill two birds in one stone.
This
means
,
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both performers and audience can benefit from
this
kind of organisations. In conclusion,there are works has to be done by
governments
this
does not only build some facilities
such
as hospitals and schools
also
should leave a piece of pie from the whole to encourage arts.
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