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Some people think that competitive sports have positive effects on teenager education, while others argue that effect is negative. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Nobody would dispute the fact that all teenagers need to have a healthy life by doing
sports
.But some people think that youngsters should not play competitive
sports
 because it can harm them.While others think that competitive sport
such
 as football
have
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 a positive effect on children.I reckon that all teenagers should do
sports
 and sometimes they can play
competitive
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competitively
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.In
this
 essay,I will discuss both opinions and give a relevant opinion. On the one hand,I believe that
such
games
 as football or
bassketball
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basketball
 have a lot of advantages.To be honest, it can be really hard to play in
team
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the team
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 and you can have
misconception
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a misconception
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with
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about
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 your team players.But if you learn how to work in
group
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a group
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 and have
a
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apply
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good
comunication
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communication
 and mutual understanding skills it might help you in future.I reckon that people will use
this
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these
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 skills in
thier
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their
 future work.
For example
,
usually
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,usually
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 employees need to do projects in big groups.
Moreover
, rival
games
 can be more
entertaing
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entertaining
 and more interesting
then
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 playing alone.
On the other hand
, rival
sports
 have a negative effect on children.Generally, competitive
games
 end with anger from the
one
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ones
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 who
lose
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loses
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 which can lead to
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a fight
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fight
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.In my childhood, I used to cry after I lost the game and it could somehow affect my nervous system because after playing I always was embarrassed and stressed. To sum up, competitive spots are very useful and we can learn a lot from them but we should teach youngsters how to adjust to
loss
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the loss
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 and do not show anger.
Also
, I think that schools should let play rival
games
 from a certain year of birth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • teamwork
  • growth mindset
  • sense of responsibility
  • manage success and failure
  • undue pressure
  • emphasize
  • winning at all costs
  • cheating
  • aggression
  • physical and emotional burnout
  • integration
  • social cohesion
  • diverse group of peers
  • encouraging empathy
  • hyper-competitive
  • overshadows
  • joy and love for the game
  • healthy and enjoyable activity
  • stressful obligation
  • means to an end
  • promote a balanced approach
  • competition is healthy
  • sportsmanship
  • valued above victory
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