Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students.

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time, computers are everywhere in our
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places,
then
the
next
stage is to introduce it in classrooms at schools and universities.
First
of all, if we use
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device in real
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we want to teach how to do
this
better, faster and
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for future students. It appears
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increase
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of computer technology changes safety
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because we need to defend not only a house or stuff but information, too. As an example, today more people have
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of problems with losing confidential information.
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thought, we can'
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be like old humans and we need to progress all time. If they had lived in
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stage, they would have had
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changing the world for
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than today. And as our teachers give us new stuff for
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do
this
for the
next
generations.
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, classic culture and task show us another way in mind. Coming to classic task, we need to remember about changing in writing after all people started using text messages. Present social network
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read text longer than half a hundred letters. There are only small
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. In conclusion, we don'
t
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can judge us. All
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our
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generation
can do is to give our technology and experience for the
next
generations. History illustrates that changes
life
and every
next
of them was better than the
last
one. And maybe
this
step will give us chance to see
this
after couple hundred years.
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