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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Other disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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While some
people
 think that the tourists should follow local customs and attitudes where they travel to visit there due to protect local culture from changing or destroying, others, including myself, believe it is against human freedom and prophecy of developing others
cultures
.
First
 and foremost, individuals have been entitled to select their customs worldwide.
In other words
, it is against humanity's right if we impose on
people
 what they can do or do not. It is apparent that both visitors and hosts know how they should behave when confronting different
cultures
, even if they have never seen so far.
Moreover
, one of the spectacular aspects of the tourism industry is developing and recognizing worldwide
cultures
. Not only is it leads to
people
 familiar with different
cultures
, but
also
 it results in the spread and transfer of local culture overseas.
Therefore
,
people
 could feel much closer even on two different continents.
Then
, it better accepts
people
 with their customs and behaviours.
On the other hand
, some
people
 argue that foreign cloth and attitudes cause cultural disturbing in local communities and after long times it leads to vanishing local custom and behaviour. They believe visitors must follow local rules in order to protect the host culture;
however
,
this
 point of view against the principles of human free choice. If we observe
this
 issue from
this
 view, we have rejected fundamental human rights. By way of conclusion,
although
 a large number of factors are in play when it comes to the concept role of welcome other
cultures
, I believe the human choice right and developing different
cultures
 are two essential items that authorities have to consider in the tourism industry.
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