The gap between rich and poor is increasing. What problems does it cause? What solution can u suggest?

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In
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modern era, most people are suffered to earn money for their life. Money is the primary need for everyone undoubtedly.
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, a fair amount of people think that the
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between wealthy and impoverished is expanding
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nowadays.
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essay discusses what troubles does it cause and,
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I will give
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with, there are many problems are created in
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trend.
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,
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one side
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the untoward ratio is dramatically increased and
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other side the rich people are expanded to their capital
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this
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will create the Economic inequality among individuals and groups within a society
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as wages and salaries, Education, Taxes, gender, culture and etc.
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, supply and demand are affected heavily
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means can not
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distribute the
the goods equally
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,
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will make scarcity.
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, a recent survey said that
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Brazil has
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gap between rich and poor which is 2.2%.
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, there are many solutions I can recommend to reduce
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trend.
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, increase the minimum wages of
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low-skilled labour
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.
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, the government should invest
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amount in the agriculture sector in order
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the farmer can get more income
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,
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will reduce much of income inequality.
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,
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unemployment can
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diminish
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among
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the wealthy
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and underprivileged and
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literacy
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also
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.
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, women should be
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encouraged
to work as
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will not only diminish income inequality but
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increase the gross domestic product. To conclude, in the above paragraph I can suggest many points in order to reduce the
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. I think
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is the best solution for decrease the
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impoverished and prosperous.
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