ou are studying English at a private language school attended by many international students. You are planning a surprise birthday party for a friend who has been feeling particularly sad and homesick. Write to another classmate and invite her/him to the party. In your letter: - Explain the reason for the party. - Give the date and time of the party. - Suggest that the classmate could bring to the party.

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Hi Kevin, How are you? Hope everything is good

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you. Anyway, not sure that if you are aware of it,

then

our good classmate, David from Korea is going on his

birthday

17th

Saturday which on 29Th December. You know well that he feels lonely and doesn’t mingle with others,

therefore

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plaining

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a surprise

birthday

party

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him. Generally, David has been

felling

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really low as he was unable to back home due to pandemic

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trying to adapt to

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culture of

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country. Hopefully,

this

party will give him a big surprise on his

birthday

would certainly cheer him up. By the way,

this

warming party will be held in the school coffee shop at 18pm. Our

girls

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group made their own

birthday

cake, fried chickens and beef noodle.

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group of

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a boy

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boy

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, each person can bring fruits, soft

drink

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, candles or flowers.

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but not least, you are one of his best

friend

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hence

, your attendance would definitely make him happier than ever. Thanks for your cooperation. Regards, Loan

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