ou are studying English at a private language school attended by many international students. You are planning a surprise birthday party for a friend who has been feeling particularly sad and homesick. Write to another classmate and invite her/him to the party. In your letter: - Explain the reason for the party. - Give the date and time of the party. - Suggest that the classmate could bring to the party.

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Hi Kevin, How are you? Hope everything is good

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you. Anyway, not sure that if you are aware of it,

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our good classmate, David from Korea is going on his

birthday

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17th

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Saturday which on 29Th December. You know well that he feels lonely and doesn’t mingle with others,

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I am

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plaining

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a surprise

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party

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him. Generally, David has been

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really low as he was unable to back home due to pandemic

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trying to adapt to

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country. Hopefully,

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party will give him a big surprise on his

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would certainly cheer him up. By the way,

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warming party will be held in the school coffee shop at 18pm. Our

girls

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group made their own

birthday

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cake, fried chickens and beef noodle.

Remaining

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group of

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boy

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, each person can bring fruits, soft

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, candles or flowers.

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but not least, you are one of his best

friend

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, your attendance would definitely make him happier than ever. Thanks for your cooperation. Regards, Loan

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

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9 paragraphs

180 words

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