ou are studying English at a private language school attended by many international students. You are planning a surprise birthday party for a friend who has been feeling particularly sad and homesick. Write to another classmate and invite her/him to the party. In your letter: - Explain the reason for the party. - Give the date and time of the party. - Suggest that the classmate could bring to the party.

Hi Kevin, How are you? Hope everything is good

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with

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you. Anyway, not sure

that

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apply

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if you are aware of it,

then

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our good classmate, David from

Korea

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Korea,

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is going on his

birthday

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17th next Saturday

which

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, which

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is on

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29Th December. You know well that he feels lonely and doesn’t mingle with others,

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I am

plaining

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planning

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a surprise

birthday

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party

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him. Generally, David has been

felling

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feeling

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really low as he was unable to

back

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go back

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home

due to

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pandemic

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the pandemic

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, he is

also

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trying to adapt to

new

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the new

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culture of

foreign

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a foreign

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country. Hopefully,

this

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party will give him a big surprise on his

birthday

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would

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certainly cheer him up. By the way,

this

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warming party will be held in the school coffee shop at 18pm. Our

girls

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group made their own

birthday

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cake, fried

chickens

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chicken

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and beef

noodle

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noodles

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Remaining

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The remaining

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group of

boy

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boys

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, each person can bring fruits, soft

drink

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, candles or flowers.

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but not least, you are one of his best

friend

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hence

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, your attendance would definitely make him happier than ever. Thanks for your cooperation. Regards, Loan

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grammar

Fix many small word errors. Words like plaining, felling, back, 18pm should be planning, feeling, go back, 18:00.

accuracy

Make date and time clear and right. Use one way to say it and line up with the plan.

coherence

Put ideas in clear order. Start with why, then day and time, then what to bring, then close.

tone

It shows care for a friend who is sad.

content

The reason and plan are stated.

tone

It invites in a kind, warm way.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

180 words

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