Many parents, mostly mothers, stay at home to take care of the house and look after children. Many believe that the government should pay them a wage for this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Despite living in a modern era many
parents
still prefer to do all the households as well as take care of their kids by themselves.
Although
some individuals think that a salary should be paid for
this
reason by authorities, I strongly disagree with
this
statement. Some
parents
especially mothers stay at
home
to bring up their children and do the house chores
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their own, so it is not possible for both of them to work and earn
money
.
This
would cause some economic problems in the family, because these days, one
breadwinners
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can afford the expenditures of all family. Many schools are private and
also
there are many other extra classes
such
as music classes and
sport
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clubs which are available and required for upgrading kids. If only one of the
parents
work
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, the wage earner could not support all expenses. In
this
regard
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many
parents
suffer mentally or even physically due to lack of
money
.
Therefore
, it would be better
that
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governments
support these families financially by paying a perk. In
this
way, the more satisfied and happier families in a society, the
less
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social problems would be in a country.
On the other hand
, some believe that it is not logical to pay salary to
parents
who stayed at
home
to look after kids by
governments
. It is vital to invest in other benefits
such
as establishing more community
centers
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to protect families. The country needs more highly- equipped hospitals to improve people health. More facilities are required to be allocated in state schools. There are lots of other requirements in a region to be provided by
governments
. In my point of view, by paying
money
regularly to
parents
who stay at
home
by authorities, many crucial amenities and progress would
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due to lack of budget in a country. In conclusion, while some people believe that
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payment should be paid by
governments
to those
parents
who stay at
home
to take care of
home
and children, I totally disagree with them and think that that
money
should be considered for the different purposes and progress associated with the whole society.
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