It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both ideas by giving your opinion.

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In today's modern era,

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that individuals are having

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a certain talent

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as music and sports by birth. On the other side, some

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that it is wrong myths. But it is a fact that

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child

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can be trained to become a good sportsman or a musician. In my opinion, both

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sides are correct. In

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and foremost, It is a true fact that some

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born with special

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as dancing, singing, magician, artist and so on.

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, Because individuals with special

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showing their

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just within a few months after born.

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, very popular and amazing Indian singer

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Neha Kakkar has stolen many

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's hearts because of her great singing quality.

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, She is very famous all around the world. She started singing when she was only 1.5 years old by just watching her sister singing. So I completely agree that there are some

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's having special knowledge by birth.

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oppose

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myth.

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, they do not

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fact because those

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who are trying to prove

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just a rumour they have never seen any

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in their life. It is a

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claim that students can obtain

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about

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field of their interest Because Nowadays, there are many coaching institutions are available where parents can

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their sons and daughters to prepare them to become a successful

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or a musician.

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, Celebrity cricketer

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coaching from

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institution to become a successful cricketer and a coach. To summarize,

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different

individuals have

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several

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to analyze and understand the talent and

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in successful

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perspective

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I do

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that many

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with amazing talent.

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