It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both ideas by giving your opinion.

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In today's modern era,

people

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that individuals are having

a certain

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a certain talent

certain talents

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talents

such

as music and sports by birth. On the other side, some

believes

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that it is wrong myths. But it is a fact that

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child

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the child

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can be trained to become a good sportsman or a musician. In my opinion, both

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sides are correct. In

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essay, I will discuss both views by giving

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First

and foremost, It is a true fact that some

children

born with special

talents

such

as dancing, singing, magician, artist and so on.

In addition

, Because individuals with special

talents

starts

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showing their

specialty

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just within a few months after born.

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, very popular and amazing Indian singer

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Neha Kakkar has stolen many

people

's hearts because of her great singing quality.

However

, She is very famous all around the world. She started singing when she was only 1.5 years old by just watching her sister singing. So I completely agree that there are some

children

's having special knowledge by birth.

On the other hand

, some

people

who

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oppose

this

view by stating that

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wrong

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myth.

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this

, they do not

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believe

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belive

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this

fact because those

people

who are trying to prove

this

just a rumour they have never seen any

talents

this

in their life. It is a

possitive

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positive

claim that students can obtain

a knowledge

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knowledge

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about

diffrent

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different

field of their interest Because Nowadays, there are many coaching institutions are available where parents can

enroll

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their sons and daughters to prepare them to become a successful

sports person

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sportsperson

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or a musician.

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, Celebrity cricketer

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Virat

kohli

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got

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coaching from

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Mumbai

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mumbai

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institution to become a successful cricketer and a coach. To summarize,

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different

individuals have

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several

perspective

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to analyze and understand the talent and

a knowledge

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knowledge

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in successful

children

's. But as per my

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perspective

prespective

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I do

belive

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believe

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that many

children

's do

born

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with amazing talent.

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