In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

It is true that for several people, in many places around the world it is important to invest more
money
on
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building
a new high-speed
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a new high-speed railway line
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railway
lines
between
cities
. Others including me, do believe that earnings of the country should be spent on improving existing public transport.
To begin
with, it is widely believed that trains make travelling between
cities
much more convenient. In fact, it is faster than moving by
plain
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,
becasue
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because
you do not have to wait in an airport for your flight.
Moreover
, in order to visit other
cities
, people should not pay a lot of
money
to buy
plain
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plane
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tickets, as they have another better alternative like
railway
lines
.
Also
, trains play a crucial role in the shipment of different products. Even so, the cost of
the
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constructing a long-distance train system is very expensive and
this
money
could be spent more efficiently.
This
leads to the idea that
these
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money
should be spent on
improvement
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the improvement
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of a current
trasport
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transport
system.
Although
, public
trasport
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transport
is seen as environmentally friendly,
for example
, the vast
mojority
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majority
of the busses are long-standing and they can cause to pollute
atmosphere
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. So, it could be solved by investing
on
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the new modern electric busses, which do not produce harmful emissions.
In
addition
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current
trasnport
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transport
is what many people use in their daily life, so it makes sense to improve it rather than spending
money
on new high-speed
railway
lines
. To sum up,
i
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agree with the idea that
railway
lines
should be improved, in order to travel
other
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cities
.
However
, the government would be better to improve existing transport for humans’
conveniency
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convenience
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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