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Some countries import a large amount of food from other parts of the world. To what extent is this a positive or negative trend?

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Sometimes governments provide the majority of their
food
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 by importing them
instead
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 of motivating farmers to grow
food
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 inside their
countries
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.
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 it seems a negative development to me, it can be a positive idea in some
parts
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 of the
world
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. Both sides will be explored in
this
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 essay. On the one hand,
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food
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the food
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 security of those who are living in these
countries
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are
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 not guaranteed since it is highly dependent on both
global
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the global
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 political atmosphere and its resultant economic situation. Indeed, importing
food
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 from other
parts
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 of the
world
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 cannot be a sustainable form of providing
food
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 in various situations. War, disease outbreak and famine are prime examples of prevalent occasions which interrupt the export of
food
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.
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, the importers of
agriculture
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 produce of these
countries
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 face serious problems if their only source of
food
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 is importing.
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, the environmental conditions in some
parts
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 of the
world
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does
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 not allow to produce
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food
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of food
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. Agriculture consumes a considerable amount of water and soil which makes it an important issue in
countries
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 dealing with water and soil scarcity. The environment of Qatar,
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, will be damaged if the authorities decide to provide their
food
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 by farming in their arid lands.
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, it is essential some
countries
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 import
food
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 since they might suffer
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environmental consequences. In conclusion, I think
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 importing
food
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 from other
countries
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 put
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food
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the food
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 security of that nation
into
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the
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risk, in that
parts
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 of the
world
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 which have water and soil scarcity importing
food
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 can be a positive development.
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