Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals,during festival periods. People nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

These days,many

people

feel that the meaning behind historic celebrations has been neglected and what really matters is enjoying themselves. I agree with

this

allegation to some extent and in

this

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I will explain my viewpoint. Personally,I think the Internet and satellite TV have had a dominant role in accepting foreign cultures between youngsters which lead them to forget their own traditions and their meanings.

This

is because of imposition by larger outside cultures.

For instance

, in Iran, most young

people

try to celebrate western

festivals

like Halloween,

instead

of holding Iranian traditional celebrations. Even though they have no idea about the concept of Halloween.

Moreover

, due to a more demanding working lifestyle,

people

are too busy

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taking time to understand the main meaning of a traditional festival.

Therefore

, most

people

look forward to religious festivity as a holiday to relax and relieve their stress,

instead

of practising religion.

On the other hand

, there are signs that show not only the meaning of some

festivals

is remembered well, but

also

is being

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spread

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widely,take Nowruz as an example. It is a national new year festivity which is held by 300 million

people

around the world and its meaning is preserved by

people

and even Unesco. To sum up, I partly agree with the assertion that the main concept of the religious and conventional festival is faded out but there are some

festivals

which

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maintain their meaning and popularity. I think it would be a good idea to hold more writing competition about the importance of

awaring

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awarding

about traditional and cultural

festivals

in order to revive their definition between youngsters.

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Commercialization
Globalization
Cultural dilution
Traditional values
Secularization
Festivity
Heritage
Individualism vs. collectivism
Consumer culture
Intangible cultural heritage

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Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals,during festival periods. People nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

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