Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals,during festival periods. People nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

These days,many
people
feel that the meaning behind historic celebrations has been neglected and what really matters is enjoying themselves. I agree with
this
allegation to some extent and in
this
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I will explain my viewpoint. Personally,I think the Internet and satellite TV have had a dominant role in accepting foreign cultures between youngsters which lead them to forget their own traditions and their meanings.
This
is because of imposition by larger outside cultures.
For instance
, in Iran, most young
people
try to celebrate western
festivals
like Halloween,
instead
of holding Iranian traditional celebrations. Even though they have no idea about the concept of Halloween.
Moreover
, due to a more demanding working lifestyle,
people
are too busy
to
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taking time to understand the main meaning of a traditional festival.
Therefore
, most
people
look forward to religious festivity as a holiday to relax and relieve their stress,
instead
of practising religion.
On the other hand
, there are signs that show not only the meaning of some
festivals
is remembered well, but
also
is being
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widely,take Nowruz as an example. It is a national new year festivity which is held by 300 million
people
around the world and its meaning is preserved by
people
and even Unesco. To sum up, I partly agree with the assertion that the main concept of the religious and conventional festival is faded out but there are some
festivals
which
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maintain their meaning and popularity. I think it would be a good idea to hold more writing competition about the importance of
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awarding
about traditional and cultural
festivals
in order to revive their definition between youngsters.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Commercialization
  • Globalization
  • Cultural dilution
  • Traditional values
  • Secularization
  • Festivity
  • Heritage
  • Individualism vs. collectivism
  • Consumer culture
  • Intangible cultural heritage
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