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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online.

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The modern pace of life makes us increasingly appreciate our own time. The era of weekends spent in endless queues at the checkouts and fitting rooms of shopping
centers
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 is gradually becoming a thing of the past. Today, online
stores
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 offer us a wide range of
products
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, and most importantly - the opportunity to make a purchase without leaving home. A large number of people recently use online shopping, because it is easy and comfortable for
todays
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today
. There are two points of view, pros and cons of the online for both individuals and
companies
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 to buying online.
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 I want to tell
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you about
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Advantages
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the Advantages
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 and disadvantages of shopping for individuals. Online
stores
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 are usually available 24 hours a day, and many consumers in different countries have Internet access both at work and at home. You can see many discounts in online
stores
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, putting the
products
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 you like into virtual baskets.
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 promotions can save a lot on the purchase of clothing, cosmetics, electronics and other
products
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, it is a chance to make a profitable purchase. Of course, everything contributes to
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: after all, picking up a smartphone and making a couple of clicks is much easier than getting to a real store, studying the assortment for hours, communicating with sellers and eventually finding out that the
product
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 that suits you can only be ordered in a warehouse or it is not available at all availability. But
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 kind of shopping
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 has its drawbacks. The major disadvantages of online shopping are delay in delivery, lack of touch and feel of merchandise in online shopping, lack of shopping experience, lack of close examination in online shopping. A customer has to buy a
product
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 without seeing actually how it looks like and Returning the
product
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, there is an option to return the
product
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,
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 if you do not like it. But again, it is a big headache. If telling about
companies
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 who use
e-commerce
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 for providing and selling
products
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,
companies
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 can
also
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 save money on rent, utilities, maintenance, and other costs associated with physical
stores
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.
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E-commerce
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An E-commerce
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 store can essentially remain open 24/7 without hiring employees to watch over the store and protect items.
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,
e-commerce
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 allows businesses to track logistics, which is key to a successful
e-commerce
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 company. Having everything digitized makes it easier to automatically collect data and crunch numbers. The conventional retail strategy focuses on stocking fast-moving goods, but the economics of
e-commerce
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 permits slow-moving and even obsolete
products
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 to be included in the
catalog
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. Storage is less expensive, and displaying the
product
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 is as easy as adding another item page to your site. single drawbacks of online
sell
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 in for
companies
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is
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 the fraud of security and credit card are huge risks when dealing with online shopping.
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