An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

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The number of
professionals
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as doctors and teachers, are increasing from year to year.
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, they prefer to
work
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in developed
countries
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compare to their own poorer nations.
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phenomenon is mainly caused by two reasons, which are an
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enormous
wages gap between poor and rich
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, and the ego
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the
professionals
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themselves.
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, there are a number of solutions to tackle
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this situations
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.
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difference in the financial compensation between
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a rich
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country
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and poor
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may
makes
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the
professionals
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to
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leave. They can not even
fulfill
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their basic needs if they
work
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in their own
country
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. Take a look
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Africa's minimum wages, if we compare it to America's, I believe
professionals
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in the United States make
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amount of money. The
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possible reason is
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their internal ego. When they
work
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in richer
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, they
also
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can guarantee their children's
education
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in the long run.
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, if we compare the
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system between
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-world
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and
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, I
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believe the
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in
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-world
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is far
more
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better
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to the other one. There are two effective solutions that possibly can solve those problems.
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, we need help from the rich and poor
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to subsidize all the professional's minimum wages to can attract them, so they want back to their birth
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.
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initiative will
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the
professionals
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feel more appreciated.
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,
government
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the government
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need to grow more nationalism in their own
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by adding more
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curriculum
in their
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about nationalism.
Government
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The government
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needs to convince the professional from young ages that if they
work
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in their own
country
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, it means a lot for the
country
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. The
professionals
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need to know that their own nations need them to grow. To conclude,
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the problems that caused, the major solutions must come from the government themselves. I believe financial and
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support from them will attract the
professionals
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to back for their own
countries
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.
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  • Social inequality
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