Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals, during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some

people

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believe that religious

festivals

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have lost their original purposes and become opportunities to just have fun. I do not totally agree but I cannot refute

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idea. On the

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hand, there are various types of traditional

festivals

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have held on specific dates by different meanings throughout the world.

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of the big advantages of

festivals

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is gathering

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together to show unity and solidarity.

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type of

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not only helps

people

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to forget dark days but

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helps them to bring happiness. The New Year's celebration is a suitable example to illustrate how

people

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convene, giving and receiving presents along with praying the best for each other. During the

ceremony

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, not only they pay attention to the festival's meaning but

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, they are all happy together.

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, we are witness which in some veneration

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people

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especially the young generation tend to have more fun time and its aim to show how much they spend more time to party and staff, they have less time to pay attention to point of the

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. In my perspective,

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of the important reasons which cause a negligence to the source of the

ceremony

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is merging the other performance which has nothing to do with the main

ceremony

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of the best approaches to tackle the problem is to have a plan from the beginning to the end to manage the festival. In conclusion, paying more attention to the source of the

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and

festivals

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, not only shows the importance of the

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more than before, but

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it sets out that these

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continue in the future and passed on to the

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generation.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks.

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