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Schools should only offer subjects that are beneficial to students’ future career success. Other subjects, such as music and sports, are not important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Currently, there is a debate about whether schools should only offer
subjects
 that can help
students
’ future career success (i.e.,
subjects
such
 as
sports
 and
music
 are irrelevant). As far as I am concerned, I believe
subjects
such
 as
music
 and
sports
 are equally important. Compelling arguments can be made that those seemingly unimportant
subjects
such
 as
art
,
music
 and
sports
 are actually just as important as core
subjects
 like
English
 and
maths
. The
first
 point with respect to
this
 is that
art
,
music
 and
sports
 make a student a
well- rounded
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 person. There is no denying that a young person who is artistic and athletic is more likely to be physically and mentally healthy.
Furthermore
,
subjects
 like
art
,
music
 and
sports
 help
students
 to identify their interests and hobbies early in life. True, if a young person is able to know what they are really passionate about, they can continue doing what they enjoy in their adult life. More importantly,
sports
,
art
 and
music
 help
students
 strike a balance in their learning at school. Clearly, if
students
 only study
English
 and
maths
 at school, their life will be very boring. It may be tempting to argue that
students
 should focus on what makes them more successful in the future. The fundamental reason for
this
 is that
the
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mainstream society defines “success” in a narrow-minded way. By
that
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 I mean most people believe that making more money is the only definition of success and they think learning
English
 and
maths
 helps them make more money. But
further
 analysis would make it clear that being happy is probably way more important than having more wealth in the long term. On the basis of the above discussion, I believe that
subjects
such
 as
music
,
art
 and
sports
 should be taught in every school, apart from
subjects
 like
English
 and
maths
.
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