Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little can be done to rectify this.

It is undeniable that the
media
is one of the best and easy ways to spread the word. Especially, Nowadays
Internet
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is the crucial technology that made all of
the
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communication easier and faster than before, So
people
are heavily influenced by the news on social. From my point of view, I personally agree with
this
viewpoint for many reasons, described in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, in many countries the government uses
media
to their own advantage and try to control
people
's opinions via News.
For example
in North Korea
people
are strictly limited from other
media
, they can’t read or find out anything by themselves. except The news and information are allowed from the North
Korea
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government. That the reasons why the government can controls
population
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the population
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’ opinions and attitudes so easily. Only
Few
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people
can seek the truth owning to everything in the country is blocked
Likewise
, Some
democracy
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countries
also
got
this
problem. Not only
politics
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the politics
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sector but
also
Trading
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the Trading
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sector. There
are
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a lot of bad business group or political party in each country use social
media
media
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like
facebook
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, IG or Tiktok to promote about their business and the
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information's
informations
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information
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were recorded in a huge database in order to analyze data. After that, they can use the data to inoculate in
people
’s mind
for instance
Donald Trump won the election by using
facebook
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ads. In
conclution
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conclusion
,
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people
have been dominated for years by the
media
from everywhere.
Besides
, In the era of globalization, a politician and The rich can control opinions and attitudes of the
people
by using data in the social
media
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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