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"Prevention is better than cure." Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures. To what extent do you agree.

#prevention #cure #diseases #measures
Nowadays, likely all of the problems are solved by prevention and there is less demand for high-cost treatment.
Although
 we have to do some research about issues and illnesses
cure
, personally I believe that huge amount of investment must be spent in analysis and prevention which is
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 economical way. All of us, mostly in developed countries, must have strong data about sicknesses. Most of them can easily be recognized while we have enough knowledge about that and
this
 phenomenon need a huge amount of both investment and time. If government encourage their young
people
 to sciences universities and lead them to find a new case of the illnesses. we will find some
cure
 for the diseases and prevent any infections.
On the other hand
, gain awareness of the
people
 about their immunity system and how they can improve that could be more beneficial in different ways.
Firstly
, a developed immunity system and healthy body is the best warrior against any diseases. Governments can improve the awareness of their
people
 by some TV programmes and some public workshops for
people
 to know the safety protocols and prevent infection.
For example
, washing hands and using masks is the best
cure
 for
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coronavirus, which all of the media pay attention to
this
 thing to improve public knowledge.
Secondly
, A healthy lifestyle must be added to individuals.
Moreover
, Government must reduce the tax
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 the nutritional goods which is necessary for every family. Any beneficial goods
such
 as fruits and vegetables must be free from tax, which lead any families to go to buy and going to extend their vitamins and proteins in their daily meals which are important for everybody. In general, many of the scientists worked hard for finding a
cure
. But we can improve our immunity system to avoiding any mental problem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proactive
  • preventive measures
  • lifestyle diseases
  • public health
  • healthcare expenditure
  • cost-effective
  • chronic conditions
  • early detection
  • immunization
  • health promotion
  • risk factors
  • non-communicable diseases
  • disease surveillance
  • preventive diagnostics
  • health literacy
  • universal healthcare
  • primary prevention
  • secondary prevention
  • tertiary prevention
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