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When choosing a job the salary is the most important consideration to what extent do you agree or disagree

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 the view that a high_paying job is the most pivotal factor in choosing, I broadly agree with the idea that other considerations have an active role to play. On the one hand, we are living in a world that our social status has been defined by our positions and how much money we earn.
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, having lucrative jobs can contribute to maintaining a work_life balance.
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 , because they are not overloading with work, may acting better in their family responsibilities.
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, higher payrolls have provided more options for paying the living costs of householders, which consist of bills , healthcare, education, and so on.
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, given that nation are getting more and more demanding, they might need an occupation that can make a decent living out of that. Despite these advantages , other factors can be taken into account.
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, working in a friendly atmosphere in which people can get along really well with each other can lead to enhancing their both productivity and job satisfying even if they earned low_income.
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, it is proved that not having had peaceful working hours, number of staff members had conflict in their families . So, it is not worth just gaining decent wages.
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, there are a vast number of communities
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 can not be satisfied by good_prospects positions. Owning to the fact that their criteria are totally different. They want to have a positive effect apply the society which can cause increasing the level of well-being.
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 may give them a sense of achievement. In conclusion,
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 the salary is an integral part of selecting a job, I personally tend to believe that
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 is by no means the key consideration , but other items can be equally important.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consideration
  • sole factor
  • financial stability
  • security
  • motivating factor
  • dissatisfaction
  • demotivation
  • job satisfaction
  • overall well-being
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • vacations
  • career growth opportunities
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • determining factor
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