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Some people believe that it is important to spend money on family celebrations such as weddings and birthdays, while others think this is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some
people
 believe that a huge
amount
 should be spent on a Birthday or any kind of
celebration
, while other
people
 are thinking that
this
 is a waste of
money
. I will interpret it in two paragraphs. Why few
people
 are spending a vast
amount
 to the
celebration
 and in
next
 paragraph why other
people
 are thinking that
this
 is the necessity, followed by the conclusion. As we know whom
people
 are living with society person and
also
 they are attending with other
people
 celebrations, so those
people
 are believing that
this
 is the necessity to spend a lot of
money
 in
celebration
 like marriage and birthday. Like celebrity and political person are spending a huge
amount
 in
celebration
. And the other hand, who are living in normal living life and
also
 they don't have to spend maximum
amount
 to celebrate any kind of
celebration
 even marriage celebrations is a necessity, yet that
people
 can not spend a lot of
money
 . They are including normal food and inviting her relatives, who are the same as them. Like a normal person who is living with normal-like and
this
 earing few amounts
also
 living hand and mouth. Both
people
 are thinking in the right way like rich
people
 are thinking that they should spend a lot of
money
 because they are attending the rich party. And other normal parties believe that they should not spend a huge
amount
 on
celebration
 because they are not earning much and
also
 they are not attending the rich party.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • commemorate
  • festivities
  • bonding experience
  • financial strain
  • budget-friendly
  • sustainable celebrations
  • social dynamics
  • peer pressure
  • materialism
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