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Some people believe that it is important to spend money on family celebrations such as weddings and birthdays, while others think this is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #money #celebrations #weddings #birthdays #waste
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Some
people
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 believe that a huge
amount
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 should be spent on a Birthday or any kind of
celebration
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, while other
people
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 are thinking that
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 is a waste of
money
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. I will interpret it in two paragraphs. Why few
people
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 are spending a vast
amount
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 to the
celebration
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 and in
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 paragraph why other
people
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 are thinking that
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 is the necessity, followed by the conclusion. As we know whom
people
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 are living with society person and
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 they are attending with other
people
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 celebrations, so those
people
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 are believing that
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 is the necessity to spend a lot of
money
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 in
celebration
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 like marriage and birthday. Like celebrity and political person are spending a huge
amount
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 in
celebration
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. And the other hand, who are living in normal living life and
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 they don't have to spend maximum
amount
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 to celebrate any kind of
celebration
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 even marriage celebrations is a necessity, yet that
people
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 can not spend a lot of
money
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 . They are including normal food and inviting her relatives, who are the same as them. Like a normal person who is living with normal-like and
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 earing few amounts
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 living hand and mouth. Both
people
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 are thinking in the right way like rich
people
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 are thinking that they should spend a lot of
money
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 because they are attending the rich party. And other normal parties believe that they should not spend a huge
amount
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 on
celebration
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 because they are not earning much and
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 they are not attending the rich party.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • commemorate
  • festivities
  • bonding experience
  • financial strain
  • budget-friendly
  • sustainable celebrations
  • social dynamics
  • peer pressure
  • materialism
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