Today's teenager have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your opinion.

It is believed that in
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modern era, youngster lives are more pressurized than
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generation
. Adolescent life became much more complicated due to the competition and in the race of getting ahead. I will
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viewpoint and will give my opinion. Peer pressure is the main reason that teenager life is becoming stressful. Parents
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their child to achieve everything which they might
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not conquer.
Moreover
, sometimes they
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neglect that
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the period for their kid to choose what he/she wants.
For instance
, some students are in
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certain stream just because their guardians want them to be in
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, occasionally they failed to deliver
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result and they try to commit suicide. In my viewpoint, Society will always have
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powerful impact on youth. They will learn the way to live from their
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neighbourhood
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sorrounding
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it
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really difficult to
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and intellectual human being.
Although
, discrimination in the rules for boys and girls have been witnessed even in schools and colleges. Girls are always been asked to follow certain restriction
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whether
boys are allowed to live their lives with freedom.
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up to
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stress for
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generation
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the end, I would take the
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opportunity
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is changing. Lives are becoming much more complex so we should all come together and start supporting each other and
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to
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succeed
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