Some people think that travel is necessary to learn about other nations,others ,however think that tv and internet is the best way to learn.Discuss both views and give your opinion

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present world, the usage of technology is constantly on the rise. As we know that in

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technology

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or in many TV serials.

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better travelling experience. In

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about the journey

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about the TV shows and

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online

videos.

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will give my point of view. People visit many

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to get

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knowledge

about their culture, religions and languages. If we take

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India, it is a

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country which

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varities

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varieties

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languages

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condtions

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conditions

which will give many

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to tourist. It will

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the tourist, it gives

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local

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person, they earn money for their

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to feel and enjoy with

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society.

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platforms

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country

You Tube

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Dicovery

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, BBC many more have

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varieties

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history and culture. Travelling is

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expensive which is not

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person which leads

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to jail. To avoid these types of problem many prefer web

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roaming

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to various nations,

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watching

travler

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series

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you tube

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traveler

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series

are important to know about a country.

Internt

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Internet

gives you brief details regarding hotels, travelling transport

avalability

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availability

moreover

web

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brief out the location

lastly

you visit the country.

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