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The first man to walk on the moon claimed it was a step forward for mankind. However, it has made little difference in most people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the previous world, the universe was mysterious and many people enjoyed imagining it.
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, because of the development of technology, now human can travel to
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space and the
moon
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 which is the nearest place in the cosmos is becoming more familiar to us. In my view, I tend to agree with the idea that the
first
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 person that succeeded in reach the satellite brought a significant advance in human’s lives.
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 of all, success leads to uncover a plethora of mysteries about the universe and it will have a beneficial impact on us.
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, since there is a problem of depletion of fossil fuels in the earth, if new measures to produce energy is discovered
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 the
moon
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, it helps to solve the problem. Solar power is insufficient in
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 world because there is no point exposed to the sun continuously,
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, the sun lights at a particular point on the satellite. To sum up, it could be said that the achievement of the
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 the satellite have a crucial impact on solving the problem.
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, it might be true that it is not relevant for many people. At the moment, only a limited number of individuals who have considered to be highly qualified can go to the
moon
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.
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, for the general public,
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 would be still an unfamiliar story. For them, the fact that someone has landed on another planet is not directly relevant to their lives;
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, they may feel not a significant thing. In my conclusion, the fact that the human landed on the
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 is a truly important thing for mankind even it has not a direct influence on the general public.
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