In most countries, animal and plant species are declining rapidly. What are the causes of this? What measures could be done to prevent this decline?

creature and plants are especially part of the earth.
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time many species are disappearing and declining, it consists of different factors, as People's negligent attitude towards nature, exactly brokerage, emission of toxic substances on the garbage or discarding elastic
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and so on. In
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over the world populations did not
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these problems. Only some countries in Europe try to
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eco system
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and do more things, create good conditions for the wild animals and plants. Of course, it is required
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big care and
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many massive works to protect the environment by people.
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household life biodegradable things, not use plastic dishes, packages in every family.
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determine general rules in each government, for ,instance prohibit using plastic packages,
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box for
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, to get the recycling work well established, for these purpose construct industries and support local businessmen to do these works, so as not to increase the waste with plastic.
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, creating reserves to prevent our planet and animals,
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each government and local sponsors would pass
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money to these sanctuaries to do better terms for our planet.
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these planet
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save our animals and planets, even everyday use non
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