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Many criminals re-offend after they have been punished. Why do some people continue to commit crimes after they have been punished, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

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It can be said, that the recidivism of convicted people is a growing tendency worldwide. The reasons
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 issue derive from society itself. There is one common element among delinquents that all of them had a troubled childhood. Physically and mentally abusive parents often combined with drug addiction or alcoholism, unloving environment, and unrealistic expectations towards their children are often the main reasons why one turns out to be a lawbreaker or in a better case “just” a mentally ill person, who carries its wounds through
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 life. These factors can be considered
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 as the motivations of backsliding but there are several other elements of
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 phenomena. After an inmate of prison served
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 sentence and is released, one cannot rely on anyone. It
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 supporting family members nor friends and often
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 released offender is stigmatized by the community. As a consequence, these human beings become
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unassimilable members of the nation who are not able to live an ordinary, hard-working life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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