Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The given diagram illustrates the production of
bricks
for
building
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industry.The general overview here is that
bricks
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procedure consists of
seven
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stage
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,starting from clay until transported to the building industry . Looking at the
first
stage,the process commences from digging clay by digger machine before transfer to the selection process.The metal grid is used for size separated which is the smaller clays would
be get
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through the grid for preparing to the
next
step.The following stage is for shaped clay,the selected clays are mixed with sand and water.In
this
step can be the standard solid
bricks
that contain wire
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or the brick that shape by mould.Two types of
bricks
have to be dried by oven
about
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24-48 hours.After that,those dried
bricks
are bought to moderated heat kiln at 200-980
celcious
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celsius
degree and passed to the high heat kiln at 870-1300
celcious
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celsius
degree.Before packaging,
bricks
have to stay in
cooling
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chamber after
take
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out from
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for48-72 hours.Eventually, the packaging is done by arranging
bricks
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complete
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block for easier
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transported and
delivered
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to the building industry by trucks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personalized learning
  • cater
  • flexible schedule
  • extracurricular activities
  • safe learning environment
  • bullying
  • peer pressure
  • socialization
  • diversity awareness
  • structured environment
  • discipline
  • punctuality
  • resources and facilities
  • communication skills
  • teamwork
  • specialized subjects
  • experts
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